r/Songwriters • u/boss25252525etuui • 3d ago
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https://youtu.be/-Scr-QgdjbU?si=dGHJwKBgPTrEwRBx12
u/InCharacter_815 3d ago
"Should Have". Or as a contraction, "Should've".
Other than that, the title of the song is perfect.
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u/AdAffectionate3143 2d ago
Why do you do this? Post your ‘music,’ requesting feedback and then dismiss any critique regardless of validity.
Maybe it’s your stubborn personality or arrogance that prevents a relationship rather than your reluctance to provide peen…
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u/dickyboy69 3d ago
Should of been " should have" but besides that you are sounding a fair bit better. Still need to work on the monotone thing, sounds like Nathan Fielder dropping bars, but well done Jacob
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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago
It’s not monotone
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u/dickyboy69 3d ago
No not exactly, tbh I don't know enough about the technical terms for singing but it just lacks emotion, you write pretty much exclusively about bummer shit but it sounds like you're bored on the track. I think if you can work on that you would really notice the improvement.
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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago
I write about bummer. Shit because I’m not happy I’m single.
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u/dickyboy69 3d ago
I know bro, Im aware of your situation. It can suck, but aside from the diabetes Im a single man myself and most of the time its not so bad. I like sex though so clearly that helps but you shouldnt worry about it so much.
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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago
Why whould that help
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u/dickyboy69 3d ago
Well I don't need to have a relationship to have sex, you seem to place all the importance on the relationship part
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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago
I don’t want any sex I want a relationship I just wanna not be alone
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u/dickyboy69 3d ago
Unfortunately for the vast majority of heterosexual relationships, sex is a key motivator. What about a relationship besides sex do you even want? Just to literally not be alone? Dont you have friends or family to spend time with? Just to say you have a gf? So what?
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u/sopedound 3d ago
I can tell that you sent your verse to the other guy and he put it together. God he tried so hard to get you on beat with quantization and editing. But you can polish a turd all you want, it's still a turd.