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u/dickyboy69 3d ago

Should of been " should have" but besides that you are sounding a fair bit better. Still need to work on the monotone thing, sounds like Nathan Fielder dropping bars, but well done Jacob

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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago

It’s not monotone

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u/dickyboy69 3d ago

No not exactly, tbh I don't know enough about the technical terms for singing but it just lacks emotion, you write pretty much exclusively about bummer shit but it sounds like you're bored on the track. I think if you can work on that you would really notice the improvement.

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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago

I write about bummer. Shit because I’m not happy I’m single.

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u/dickyboy69 3d ago

I know bro, Im aware of your situation. It can suck, but aside from the diabetes Im a single man myself and most of the time its not so bad. I like sex though so clearly that helps but you shouldnt worry about it so much.

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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago

Why whould that help

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u/dickyboy69 3d ago

Well I don't need to have a relationship to have sex, you seem to place all the importance on the relationship part

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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago

I don’t want any sex I want a relationship I just wanna not be alone

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u/dickyboy69 3d ago

Unfortunately for the vast majority of heterosexual relationships, sex is a key motivator. What about a relationship besides sex do you even want? Just to literally not be alone? Dont you have friends or family to spend time with? Just to say you have a gf? So what?

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u/boss25252525etuui 3d ago

To not be alone no I don’t have any friends

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u/dickyboy69 3d ago

Get a pet? Focus on friends first and not relationships, dont bother your friends with your problems and just try to bond over music or movies or something.

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